加强一些长句和复杂句的使用;文中有较多拼写错误,请作者增加词汇量的积累;全文结构不够严谨,文中很少使用衔接词和过渡词;请注意分段;连词使用偏少。
y ~lovely time This is my lovely time! I very very happy! I met very best friend. They are from China.is 李宛晴,庞心源,陈坤,黄玮,黄韵琦……They are very good! 李宛晴good at play the erhu.she is a very clever and cute girl.庞心源good at dance and sing.She is a beautiful girl.陈坤 good at 电子琴.she is a very good girl……They are like read book and danne and sing.They are good at Chinese.This is my best friend!