作者用词生动多样,学术词汇使用比较准确,但有少数拼写错误;过渡词很丰富,衔接词同时使用的恰到好处;复杂句采用很棒。
The bar chart given above demonstrates clearly that the electricity consumption in a small city experienced some changes during the past several years. Based upon the data provided,one can see that from 2004 to 2007, it increased by 2.51% from 4.6 million kilowatt to 4.723 kilowatt. However, it decreased by 0.8% from 4.723 in 2005 kilowatt to 4.7 kilowatt in 2006. Then it increased by 12.88% to 5.26 million kilowatt in 2007. It's no diffcult job foeward some factors to account for the phenomenon. Reasons can be listed as follows: in the first place, with the improvement of financial status and living standard, electrical appliances such as television sets , refrigerators, washing machines , air conditioners and so on are becoming increasingly widespread , howeverwe mast admit that all these machines will not only offer us great convenience, but consume more electricity. Moreover, factories located around the city are also main factors of the rising of electricity consumption. Last but not least, the absence of citizens’ consciousness of economizing on electricity also leads to the rising of consumption. The rapid increase of electricity consumption shows that it has been playing an indispensable role in our life. Vital to all aspects of modern life, electricity is far from being sufficient. Accordingly, it is urgent that every one of us should foster the consciousness of saving electricity.
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