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Sam got up at 6:00 yesterday. Then he rode to the park and had fun there. At noon he and his parents had lunch in McDonald's. In the afternoon he played basketball with his classmates from 4:00 p.m. till 6:00 p.m. after supper, he went for a walk with his father. his father bought him a CD of classical music. how fun Tom had yesterday.