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I am a student in CuiZihan Junior High School. I'm in Class 2, Grade 7. Our monitor is LiuKai. She is 13 years old. Liu Kai is tall and strong. Her hair is yellow and short. She has a round face with big eyes, a small nose and a wide mouth. Now she is in a white coat, blue pants and a pair of brown shoes. Liu Kai is my good friend. We like him very much.