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I am a student in CuiZihan Junior High School. I'm in Class 2, Grade 7. Our monitor is LiuKai. She is 13 years old. LiuKai high is and vigorous. Her hair is yellow and short. She has a round face with big eyes, an insignificant and a wide mouth. Now she is in a white coat, blue pants and a pair of brown shoes. Liu Kai is my good mate. We like him extremely much.