简单句型过多,从句使用不熟练;作者词汇表达不够灵活,但有些单词拼错了;层次不清晰,几乎没有使用衔接词;请注意分段。
This year, my family had built a new house. It was designed and built by my father himself. It has three stores with two very big windons. I like them very much. Its outlook is red and you will think it is a ancient building when your first sight of it. You will see many fruit-trees around it. People who pass by our house will leave their apprciate. I feel proud of it. I love it very much.