小学二年级英语作文:A Trip

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Yesterday, My farther, my sister and I had travel to the Nanhai Yingshi City. When we arriveled at the gate of it. we cannot help admire its spelled. It looked just similar with when we saw the buildings which looks like ancient. Then, we entered and saw a great buildings, it is the palace with gold. There are many beautiful sight inside it, like the Old Street of Hongkong and the Old Town of Jiangnan, etc.. Finaly, we have a good time there.