小学三年级英语作文:When I grow up

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When I am growing up, I will become a woman who is powerful. And if I have seeing someone who is poor, I could help him. When I am growing up, I will become a elegent lady, and my family will pround of me. When I am growing up, I will by my family side, happy with them. I know all of them just if, however, I believe they will come true one day.