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My father is a worker of building houses.His workis very hard. He gets up very early. When I was awaeked, he left home to workplace. My father is very dutiful, too. He working hard despite the hot sunlight. He doesn' t at home until the night falls. When father cames, we started our dinner. Then father went to whached TV while talking to us. This is my father' s day, it repeats over and over again, but he look happy and enjoy it very much.