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Sam got up at six yesterday. And then he went to park by bike, he had a good time there. Sam and his parents went to McDonald's for lunch. In the afternoon, he played basketball with his classmates at school from 4:00 pm till 6:00pm. After dinner, sam and his father went for a walk, his father bought a classic music CD for him. How interesting day he had!