正确句子比例很高,但需多多加强从句的使用;文中有较多拼写错误,请作者增加词汇量的积累;语言不流畅;可以适当增加副词的使用;连词使用偏少。
my name is marry. i am 17 year old. my school is smk bandar bintulu. i am a student. my father's name is ali. my father is making mechanic. my father is 24 years old. my mother's name is maliie. my mother is making homework. my mother is 25 year old. i have four brothers. my hobby is read storybooks and listen music. my ambition is a teacher because teacher can teach my students. i can tell ''how to improve your english''.