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Sam got up at 6 yesterday . Then went to park by bicycle, he was very happy in the park . His parents and he took dinner in the McDonald's . Sam and his classmate played basketball at school afternoon ,from 4 PM to 6PM . After lunch , hie father and he went for a walk , and his father bought a classic music CDfor he . How is a funny day for Sam .