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Laosi Dumpling House 1.The Dumpling House has so many different dumplings, and the dumplings is biggest and very delicious. 2.There are tow dumplings to sale because the new store opening, the vegetables for 2 yuan 20 I think the vegetarian would be try, the beef and vegetable 's for 5 yuan 20 it is good to buy because we can try the different taste. Welcome to my house. Address:234 Peace Avenue Tel:03732256