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Hello, my name is lucy King. I am thirteen years old. I am a british girl. I like sports very much, and I aways like listening to music, sometimes I would like go to cinime to watching a great movie. And now i want find a chinese pen pal because i love China, i want to know more about China. I hope i can find a chinese girl, has the similar hobbits and i can study chinese for her.I hope i can reccept the latter soon.