托福Toefl作文模拟题附范文 第48篇:是否是只有你赢得了比赛才说明参与运动是有价值的

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Participating in sports can certainly be more rewarding if a player wins, but it can be fun even in the face of defeat. The word only in the question needs to be examined. In addition, the term sports should be defined more clearly. Without looking at these two words more closely, the statement may be illogical. To deem something effective in a set of circumstances by using the word only completely limits its power. Then, the use of only here sets up and either-or logical fallacy. In other words, a person can never have fun if he does not win. That suggests that even a ball game with a tied score cannot produce any fun at all. Consequently, during a five-hour game of cricket, not even one minute of fun will be included if the game is lost. The word only makes that point unrealistic. There is no way to put off fun until the end of the game and then have it only if one wins. That takes us to the word game. There are countless games in every society on earth. These include athletic games, word games, mind games, and combinations of them all. It is extremely likely that someone will enjoy herself while competing against other people. The nature of many sports reinforces relaxation, laughter, and friendship. Teammates and competitors often joke around during the actual game itself. Adhering to the premise that people have fun only when they win, it is ridiculous to assume that opponents will even laugh at all until the final score is realized. After all, laughter indicates enjoyment. Furthermore, a lot of games exist whereby one plays against herself. What if she beats herself? Then, who wins and who loses? If she beats her last score, as occurs with many computer games, can she be a happy winner and a score loser at the same time? These qualifications lead to some final comments. It is certainly more fun, at least most of the time, to win rather than to lose. However, the sport is in the competition, and the pride is in the excellence. Losing, or not winning the game, is usually a building block to success. Everyone loses at something at some point. The winners learn from it and improve on their mistakes.