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Yesterday,Sam got up at six,then he ride a bike to the park,he was very happy in the park,at noon ,he with his parents went to the McDonald's for lunch,they are look so happy.In the afternoon,he was play basketball with his classmates on the ground in the school,from 4pm till 6pm.After dinner,Sam with his father went for a walk,and his father bought a classical CD for him,How a interesting day for Sam!