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Nowadays, people's life is filled with competent and pressure,and people have to work harder than before to keep up with the development of technology.The problem rised that how can we deal with the relationship between work and play.According to the attitude person have,human beings are divided into two classes:firstly,those whoes work is work and pleasure is pleasure:and the secondly, those whose work and pleasure are one. The former person think that one should be consentrate in one thing whatever which is work or play.Only by this way one can do something efficiently.On the contary, the latter person think it is not time for us to take retainment without working, and purily playing will occupy our treasure time.In order to achieve success, we have to make good use of our time. In my opinion, I think the former people's attitude is more reasonable than the latter.There are many factors.At the first place, there are many aspects in our life and success does not only mean earning more money or gain more reputation.The significant life should be colorful and happiness.Pleasure which is not along with work play a important part in our life.
