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Dear editor, I'm writing to talk about if every family should have own cars.And we class had a discussion.Next I will tell you our conclusions。 On the one hand,I think car is convenient,quick and comfortable。Own cars make our life get more and more beautiful。Reflect the improvement of national living conditions, the prosperity of the country。Cars become more and more usual。Something about cars also developed。So car is good。 On the other hand,pollution With the development of car is increasingly serious。And traffic accident is increasing as well。Now the cars where stop is also a problem。 So the car also has two sides。Thank you reading。 Yours truly, Li Hua