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The summer holiday is coming. Our class have had a discussion about what to do during the holiday.The side think should stay at home because it is convenient and comfortable。Even so they also think the outside world can't know by ourselves。Of course,other side think we can go out and to travel。Because they think travel can increase their knowledge and open our eyes。Some classmates say "Though travel can increase their knowledge and open our view ,it will spend many money and is not convenient. I think we should not only study at home but also we should go out and relax。We should plan how to spend the holiday。
