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Sam wake up at six O`clork in the yesterday ,then he went to the park by riding bycicle ,he have a good time in the park. when the lunch time , he eat some food in McDonald`s with his parents. AT 4 O`clork pm , Sam played baskatball with his classmates at the school until six O`clork. After dinner , Sam went for a walked with his father ,and father bought a classical CD for him. that is Sam`s a day .So funny.