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Sam got up in six clock yesterday.Then,he went to park by bike,and have a good time.He have lunch with her parents in McDonald's.In afternoon,Sam play basketball with her classmates in school,from pm'4 to 5 o'clock .After dinner,Sam go for a walk with his father, and his father buy a CD for him.It'a wonderful day.