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Yesterday Sam got up at six and then rode to the park.He enjoyed himself in the park and had lunch with his parents at McDonald's.That afternoon,he played basketball with his classmates in school,from four till six.After supper,Sam went for a walk with his father and his father bought a CD of classical music for him.What a funny day that Sam spent!