文中词汇表达比较多样,能多用学术词汇就更好了;熟练使用了一些长难句;衔接词和过渡词用的很不错。
As the world get modern,everything get simply,like cars,them symbolize country get strong and rich,and cars can drive other industry development。 but when we are enjoyed their convenient,we ignore a thing that there is a shortcoming that people get more and more lazy,whatever palace we go,we will choose to drive the car,so we produce pollution unconsciously。And the cars are so many that traffic get more and more bad,we can hear many traffic accidents even we can see them。Not only traffic accident is a problem,but also parking problem is。In some housing estate,some people can not find palace to park,it make them angry。 So,so many problems are waited for us to solve,in fact them are not a different problem,solve them or not,depend on people,if we go out,we can choose bus or walk,bike and so on,it can keep our healthy and could protect the nature,satisfy both sides。So just do it!