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my favorite sports is football . I fell in love with it by chance. One day, I found a football on my way home. Then I played it with my friends. From then on, football became my favorite sport. I often play football with my friends after class. We often train ourselves, and sometimes we compete in football games in order to improve our skills. We all fell happy . Among all the football stars, I like Beckham best.It is not his handsome appearance but his skills that impress me a lot.My want to become a professional football player in the future. I will do my best to achieve my dream. I hope my dream will come true.