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5．可适当增加细节，使内容连贯。信的开头已为你写好。词数：100左右。
Dear Mr. Smith ,
I was so pleased to hear from you and am writing to tell you something about my school and school life .
Yours sincerely,
Li Hua
学术词汇比较灵活，还要请作者增加词汇表达的丰富度；句法很棒，若适当增加一些从句的使用，文章会取得更好的成绩；层次不清晰，几乎没有使用衔接词；请注意分段；可以适当增加副词的使用；连词使用偏少。
our school constructed in 1990, it had instructors class 48, the teacher 280 , the student 3200 .and our classroom buildings can hold more than 60 classes, Library book collection 20 ten thousand volume, The science and technology museum has many physics and the chemical laboratory, four pronunciation classrooms and so on. I'm in class four.Studies the main curriculum to include: Language, mathematics, English, physics, chemistry, computer.i am good at English and computer,my Hobby are Listen to the pop music, the swimming and the ice-skating.
