初中英语命题作文真题演练(69):长大后

文中单词拼写做的很棒，再多积累些词汇就更好了；简单句比重过高，另应加强复杂句的练习；文章结构欠严谨，基本没有衔接成分；请注意分段；连词使用偏少。

I have an idol.His name is Vae.He is a famous singer.I love him very much.I am influenced by what I constantly sees and hears，so I want to be a singer. My sound is sweet,but not stand out.I think I can practice in my home.I like singing happily in a loud voice alone. I full of happiness. I am a good student,and my Chinese is good,so I can write good songs.I believe I will be a good singer!