行文较为流畅,作者文中过渡词使用的不错;文中从句使用不丰富;文中有较多拼写错误,请作者增加词汇量的积累;请注意分段;连词使用偏少。
i have a house ,a big and bright house , my house is nearly my shcool. so i often get up at 7:30 am every morning and then go to school from my house through a road . in my house , we are living there ,sleeping ,eating ,talking everything , i love my house ,i stay in my house i feeling safty and comfertable . i love my family ,we are living together in our big house happiness .