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Sam get up at 600 in yesterday.then he go to park by bike,he have a good time in park.he and parents eat lunch in the McDonald’s. In the afternoon, Sam and her classmate play basketball at school,Since the 400 p.m till 600 p.m.after eat dinner,Sam and farther go for a walk ,my farther buy a piece of the classical music CD.Sam have a fun day.