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Hello everybody,My name is tom.Now,I would like to talk about you about my life rults.Every mornig I get up at 6:00.Then I wash my face and eat breakfast.I go to school at 6:15.When I leave my house,my mother zlways says:"Do not eat outside,it is bad for your healthy.Do not listen music on school day.It is bad for your study.Do not watch TV on school nights.It is bad for your eyes."We have 4 classes in zhe morning and 3 classes in zhe afternoon.I back home by 12:00 in the morning and by 9:20 in the evening.when I go back home at night,I doing my homework everynight.we have too much homework and I always go to bed very night.