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Hello everybody,My name is tom.Now,I would like to talk about you about my life rults.Every mourning I get up at 6:00.Then I wash my face and have breakfast.I go to school at 6:15.When I leave my house,my mother always says:"Do not eat outside,it is bad for your health.Do not listen music on school day.It is bad for your study.Do not watch TV on school nights.It is bad for your eyes."We have 4 classes in zhe morning and 3 classes in zhe afternoon.I back home by 12:00 in the morning and by 9:20 in the evening.When I go back home at night,I doing my homework everynight.We have too much homework and I always feel sleepy.