句法知识很棒,若增加一些从句的使用,文章会更出色;作者能较灵活地使用词汇表达,但要多积累学术词汇;文章结构欠严谨,基本没有衔接成分;请注意分段。
Hello everybody,My name is tom.Now,I would like to talk about you about my life rules.Every mourning I get up at 6:00.Then I wash my face and have breakfast.I go to school at 6:15.When I leave my house,my mother always says:"Do not eat outside,it is bad for your health.Do not listen to music on school day.It is bad for your study.Do not watch TV on school nights.It is bad for your eyes."We have 4 classes in zhe morning and 3 classes in the afternoon.I back home by 12:00 in the morning and by 9:20 in the evening.When I go back home at night,I doing my homework every night.We have too much homework and I always feel sleepy.But I think studying is an interesting thing,I can learn in it.