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Hello everybody,My name is tom.Now,I would like to talk about you about my life rules.Every mourning I get up at 6:00.Then I wash my face and eat meals hurry prematurely.I go to school at 6:15.When I leave my house,my mother always says:"Do not eat outside,it is bad for your health.Do not listen to music on school day.It is bad for your study.Do not watch TV on school nights.It is bad for your eyes."We have 4 classes in the morning and 3 classes in the afternoon.I back home by 12:00 in the morning and by 9:20 in the evening.When I go back home at night,I doing my homework every night, and it takes me 4 hours to finish it.We have too much homework and I always feel sleepy.But I think studying is an interesting thing,I can learn in it.