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Sam gets up at six o'clock yesterday. Ten he is went to park by bike and he was very happy when he was stay park.He and his parents have lunch at noon at the mcdonald's. In the afternoon four o'clock from six o'clock,Sam and his friend paling basketball in the school.at after dinner ,sam and his father go for a walk ,his father give him buy the classical musical cd.