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How Should Parents Help Children to Be Independent? Parents are the guardians of children before they grow up. SO,nowadays, many parents are willing to do anything the children ask them to.However, it's harmful. Helping children to do everything will diminish the room of children's growing.Especially Chinese parents. In order to help children to be independent,parents sometimes should leave them alone,to handle tough things by children themselves.Parents should be a good observer, to discriminate what things the children need to be helped and what they needn't. Sometimes letting go is not about giving up,maybe it's the best way to be independent to children. More experiences to handle the troubles will help children to accommodate the relationship of society. When they grow up ,they will be more independence and helpful. Maybe independence is the most precious gifts during children's life.