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Yesterday Sam got up at six o'clock.Then he went to the garden by bicycle and played very happy in there.At afternoon he went to the MC donald's to have lunch with his parents.From four to six o'clock at afternoon,he played the basketball with his classmates in the school.After supper,Sam went for a walk with his father and his father bought a classic CD.This is so funny for sam.