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A happy day Sam got up at 6:00 ,then go to park by bike and play excited.He had lunch at maidanglao with his parents and he play basketball with his classmates from 4:00 to 6:00 .Sam go for a walk after wancan . his father buy a classical music CD for him.Sam lead a happy day .