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Sam got up at 6 o'clock yesterday. Then he rode to the park, where he had a good time.At noon, he ate the lunch with his parents in McDonald’s. In the afternoon, Sam as well as his classmates played basketball from 4 :00 till 6:00. After dinner,Sam went for a walk together with his father and his father bought a CD of classical music for him.What an interesting day for Sam!