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My first name is Lucy and my last name is King. I'm 13 years old and I'm from UK, so my mother language is English.what's more, I love sports ,music and movies. The reason I introduce my details is that I want to find a pen pal in China, because I love China and I'd like to know more about China from my pen pal. Morever, I want a Chinese girl pen pal, who has the same hobbies as me. And I can learn English from her as well. If you are the right person and willing to be a pen pal with me. Please connect me by ...