词汇表达较灵活准确,学术词汇使用过少,另外注意文中个别的拼写错误;行文稍显不流畅,应增加文中衔接词的使用;采用了一些简单的从句;可以适当增加副词的使用。
My first name is Lucy and my last name is King. I'm 13 years old and I'm from UK, so my mother language is English.What's more, I love sports ,music and movies. The reason I introduce my details is that I want to find a pen pal in China, because I love China and I'd like to know more about China from my penpal. Morever, I want a Chinese girl , who has the same hobbies as me. And I can learn English from her as well. If you are the right person and willing to be a penpal with me. Please connect me by ...