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"What is your favorite sport?" if someone ask me this question ,Iwill tell her/him clearly:I like football best as playing football not only make me relax but also make me stronge. I fall in love with football by chance.That day,I saw a football lay on background in my way to school,I picked it up and played with my friends .Since that day I always play football and take part in various kinds competitions with my classmates. My favorite football star is Beckham,and my dream is becoming a professional football player.I think if I woke hard my dream will be come truth.