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My name is Lucy and family name is Lucy King.I am a 13-year-old girl.I come from the UK.I began to love chinese when I was five.My morther tell me plenty of chinese culture. I crazy it.I hope we become good friends.I also tell you my country tradition.I have a lot of habbies such as sports, music, movies.We can communicate with ourselves.We can learn mother language each other.I hope you will come my town in the future .I look forward to your letter.