拼写很棒,可适当增加学术词汇的使用;过渡词和衔接词使用的比较不错;文中从句数量稍显不足,注意个别有错误的句子。
How to improve school safety Since 2010, several campus violence happened, which shocked all the country, and caused a deep thought in the society: How can we prevent the campus violence and protect students from harm. However, the ordinary security methods should be strengthened. Firstly, the distinguishment of the visitor's identity should be strengthened, to make sure strangers can't get into the campus without permission. Secendly, there should be security guards hanging around the campus, specially during the night. Lastly, the security education of students should be strengthened too. in addition, for our students, the most important thing to do is to be aware of how to protect ourselves and how to keep away from danger.