拼写做的很棒,在平时练习中注意词汇量的积累;可适当增加从句和复杂句使用;行文稍显不流畅,应增加文中衔接词的使用;请提高文章内敛性,段落和句子要围绕主题展开。
With the development of informational technology and the popularization of internet, more and more E-books rise on the internet. Some people even believe that the E-books will replace traditional books someday.They hold the idea that E-books can be used more convenient than traditional books because they can be scan anytime online no matter where the readers are. Meantime, reading E-books costs readers less money. Finally, there are so many kinds of E-books online that we can choose what we like to read. Allow for these reasons, many people convince that the E-books will replace traditional books someday. However, every coin has two sides, E-books also has some disadvantages, in which I believe E-books will not replace traditional books. In the first place, reading too much E-books online is bad for our eyes. As we all know, a E-books just can be read by the screen of computer. Have we look at the screen for a long time, our sight will below. In the second place, the abuse of E-books will cause the intrusion of copyright. E-books can be copied by anyone, it is harmful for the copyright of authors. It even can lead to crimes. In summary, I hold the idea that traditional books will not be supplanted by E-books. Traditional books is not only good for our health, but also is a cultural formation which we get from our forerunners, we should protect them well.