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If you ask me that what's my favorite sport,my answer will be football definitely. One day,an ordinary day,I went home as usually,then a football suddenly entered into my sight.I picked it up and bring it home,after that,I played it with my friends.Maybe it was an amazing ball,maybe it was an amazing day,I cannot explain, but since that I fall in love with the football.And all these changes totally because I picked a football by chance. Probably,the football will accompany me in my rest life,I think.My favorite sports star is Beckham,who is excellent in playing football.To be a professional football player is my biggest desire.So I often join the training and the game with my classmates to make my desire come true early.