作者词汇表达较为熟练,学术词汇使用不是很多;正确句子比例较高,适当增加复杂句的使用,文章会更出色;层次不清晰,几乎没有使用衔接词。
One possible version: Pen pal wanted Hello, my name is Lucy King. I’m from the UK and I can speak English. I want a pan pal in China. I think China is a beautiful country. And I wand to learn Chinese. Because I think Chinese is one of the most beautiful language. I’m 13 years old and my birthday is in December. I have a little dog named Coco. I am love it very much. And I like playing sports and listening to the music on my free time. On weekends, I often go to the movies with my parents. I hope I can hear from you as soon as possible.