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If you ask me what's my favorite sport, My answer definitely is football. I have picked a football on the way to my home, and then I played with my friends frequently, and I was fascinated deeply by football. I joined in the football trainining and competition with my schoolmates. David Beckham from England is my favortie football superstar, and I hope I can become a professional football player in future.