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Lora thinks that if he wokes part-time this summer he would not only earn some money but also challenge himself,the important is that he could learn a lot from the job. But Lora's parents do not think so.In their opinion,part-time job is absolute wastful time and Lora shuold do something significant during this summer instead of woking part-time. In my view,woking part-time is good for senior high school sudents as they can get some useful skills and experience from part-time jobs.On the other hand,it may accelerate they work hard after the summer holiday.
