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Last Friday morning，″Miss Big Eyes″Su Mingjuan came to our school and gave us a talk．She told us something about Hope Project．She said that with Hope Project′s help，she received a better education． At the same time, she told us many children in the country has no chance to go to school yet．They are too poor to go to sch001．I was moved．and I decided to do something for them． After the talk．1 went back home and wrote a letter to Hope Project．And then I sent the letter with all my pocket money to Hope Project by mail．I hope it can help the poor children．
