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Sam got up n six o'clock yesterday. Then he went to the park by bick. He have a good fun in the park. He had lunch with his parents at noon. Sam played the basketball with his classmates from the 4 to 6 o'clock in the afternoon. After super, Sam went for a walk with his father. His father bought a classfic CD for him. How fun it was.
