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Sam gets up 6 o'clock yesterday. Then he rides bike to park, and he has a good time at the park. He has lunch with his perents in McDonald's. Sam plays bastketball with his classmate from 4 o'clock till 6 o'clock this afternoon. After dinner, Sam go for a walk with his father, and his father buys a class music CD for him. what a fun day for Sam.